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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by Skonn on 2012/04/22 2:48:27 pm
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by mark (James Bailey) on 2012/04/22 3:01:21 pm
First off I think the format is GREAT! i love the look, feel and read of it. It would be nice to be able to update all of my bios into this look.
Great work and I hope that people will be able to give you some ideas or direction. I can only give you praise and envy hehhe Nice work!
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by paynesgrey on 2012/04/22 4:42:17 pm
Really sharp stuff! Meshes nicely with some bits down the line in my own story, particularly T'Pau's role. People tend to paint her as though she was xenophobic in general, but she was more concerned with protecting Vulcan traditions from those who didn't understand or respect them. "Outworlders" who honor Vulcan's ways were ok in her book, so I can see her going to bat for the Vulcan who has forsaken the raptor's wings for the path of logic.
I've got a few "exchange of memos" scenes coming up myself, but to do the whole bio in this format, having these different... and formal... voices painting a consistent and complementary picture of one character is damn fine work.
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by ironhead1982 on 2012/04/22 7:20:01 pm
Very impressive Skonn. Well done and interesting to read. Live long and prosper.
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by Dan (mygod_itsfullofstars) on 2012/04/25 8:19:54 am
This is fantastic! Thanks for sharing. I just gave it a first read-through and will look at it again later today to try to clarify any thoughts or impressions I have.
It's definitely got me wanting to know more. I hope you'll continue writing.
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by Skonn on 2012/04/25 12:53:55 pm
mygod_itsfullofstars wrote: | This is fantastic! Thanks for sharing. I just gave it a first read-through and will look at it again later today to try to clarify any thoughts or impressions I have.
It's definitely got me wanting to know more. I hope you'll continue writing. |
Thank you! I would like to get your impression later on
I have thought about continuing this, especially Skonn's first impressions upon arrival, by way of personal logs. I thought about breaking up events this way to make it a simpler read, as it's much easier to pick up where you left off. I should be able to write more this weekend.
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by TamReese on 2012/05/02 9:25:12 am
I love it! Going to read it again to absorb it fully!
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by Stuart (speedofheat) on 2012/05/02 4:17:01 pm
very good stuff, i like the ties into project christopher!
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by Skonn on 2012/05/02 5:28:36 pm
Thank you, Speed!
And thank you as well, TamReese! Just as with Dan, I look forward to hearing your opinions!
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by Melawil on 2012/05/03 2:52:45 pm
I love it! I'd like to see more from Skonn's point of view, too. Perhaps private log entries, or even a short story.
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re: Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!
by Cpt_Guthrie on 2012/05/06 9:24:33 am
Very nicely done.
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