Feedback on my bio would be most appreciated!

[Skonn]

If you have the time, please take a gander at my bio:

http://stotosveteransfleet.guildlaunch.com/users/characters/blog/13208086/4189/on-early-years-23rd-century-service-record-of-skon/?char=13208086&gid=205090

And tell me what you think! Feedback and criticism will be very appreciated

[mark (James Bailey)]

First off I think the format is GREAT! i love the look, feel and read of it. It would be nice to be able to update all of my bios into this look.

Great work and I hope that people will be able to give you some ideas or direction. I can only give you praise and envy hehhe Nice work!

[Sky Falls In Thunder]

Really sharp stuff! Meshes nicely with some bits down the line in my own story, particularly T'Pau's role. People tend to paint her as though she was xenophobic in general, but she was more concerned with protecting Vulcan traditions from those who didn't understand or respect them. "Outworlders" who honor Vulcan's ways were ok in her book, so I can see her going to bat for the Vulcan who has forsaken the raptor's wings for the path of logic.

I've got a few "exchange of memos" scenes coming up myself, but to do the whole bio in this format, having these different... and formal... voices painting a consistent and complementary picture of one character is damn fine work.

[ironhead1982]

Very impressive Skonn. Well done and interesting to read. Live long and prosper.

[Dan (mygod_itsfullofstars)]

This is fantastic! Thanks for sharing. I just gave it a first read-through and will look at it again later today to try to clarify any thoughts or impressions I have.

It's definitely got me wanting to know more. I hope you'll continue writing.

[Skonn]

mygod_itsfullofstars wrote:

This is fantastic! Thanks for sharing. I just gave it a first read-through and will look at it again later today to try to clarify any thoughts or impressions I have. It's definitely got me wanting to know more. I hope you'll continue writing.

Thank you! I would like to get your impression later on

I have thought about continuing this, especially Skonn's first impressions upon arrival, by way of personal logs. I thought about breaking up events this way to make it a simpler read, as it's much easier to pick up where you left off. I should be able to write more this weekend.

[TamReese]

I love it! Going to read it again to absorb it fully!

[Richard Silk]

very good stuff, i like the ties into project christopher!

[Skonn]

Thank you, Speed!

And thank you as well, TamReese! Just as with Dan, I look forward to hearing your opinions!

[Melawil]

I love it! I'd like to see more from Skonn's point of view, too. Perhaps private log entries, or even a short story.

[Cpt_Guthrie]

Very nicely done.